Hey everybody! This is my first entry into the card design competition, and I'm pretty excited. What do you think?
Welcome to our side of things :D
I also like the first one better, because the other card is just the original with a "Recruit 3 Murlocs" Battlecry tacked on. The first iteration captures the "I'm a Murloc that grows powerful" feel but does so in a new way. It's a little weird to be borrowing Gral, the Shark's effect before he ever existed, but I'm trying to be lenient lol. This is also way better than Gral, but Gral kind of sucks so whatever.
Gral is so bad that I actually forgot he existed, so I didn't know I was copying :)
Do you think I should say something like "remove 3 murlocs" or "destroy 3 murlocs" to have a different flavor, or should I change it mechanically?
I don't think it's a deal-breaker to use Gral's effect, if you want to keep it, although maybe change the watermark to avoid the issue. Make it a custom watermark, suggesting it came after Gral.
If you want to change the card mechanically to be separate from Gral or whatever, you could say "Charge. Battlecry: Destroy 3 friendly Murlocs and gain their stats. Deathrattle: Resummon them." That would require board setup beforehand, instead of pulling from your deck.
I though about destroying on-board murlocs, but I thought it would be to hard to set up and wouldn't be as impactful. I think I'll keep it like it is, with a different watermark. Thanks for the feedback!
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Welcome! Glad to hear you're excited and we are excited to have you here!
I have to agree that I like the first one more. I'd change the wording a bit, and you need some periods and caps.
I'd suggest to put "3" instead of "three" in this case
Drop the "friendly" as it is redundant. There would not be enemy Murlocs in your deck.
You already caught the capitalization for Murloc and the missing period
Make sure you also have a period at the end of the deathrattle effect.
Overall great first idea for your first card competition!
Hey everybody! This is my first entry into the card design competition, and I'm pretty excited. What do you think?
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I think I like the first one better, and I'm not sure about the wording on the second one. Feedback is appreciated.
Welcome to our side of things :D
I also like the first one better, because the other card is just the original with a "Recruit 3 Murlocs" Battlecry tacked on. The first iteration captures the "I'm a Murloc that grows powerful" feel but does so in a new way. It's a little weird to be borrowing Gral, the Shark's effect before he ever existed, but I'm trying to be lenient lol. This is also way better than Gral, but Gral kind of sucks so whatever.
Gral is so bad that I actually forgot he existed, so I didn't know I was copying :)
Do you think I should say something like "remove 3 murlocs" or "destroy 3 murlocs" to have a different flavor, or should I change it mechanically?
Hey everybody! This is my first entry into the card design competition, and I'm pretty excited. What do you think?
I think I like the first one better, and I'm not sure about the wording on the second one. Murloc should be capitalized and I forgot the period, but I can fix that in my next iteration. Feedback is appreciated.
So, I haven't played in a year or two, and I just got back in. I just opened up a copy of Vessina, and I was wondering what decks I could build with her, because I have no idea what to do : ). I've got about 7000 dust saved up from last time I played, so if anyone has some fun decklists, I'd appreciate it. Thanks!
Darn, I forgot to submit my entry. I guess I'll have to wait till next week :)
Good luck everybody!
I though about destroying on-board murlocs, but I thought it would be to hard to set up and wouldn't be as impactful. I think I'll keep it like it is, with a different watermark. Thanks for the feedback!
Thanks for the advice, I'll do that.
Gral is so bad that I actually forgot he existed, so I didn't know I was copying :)
Do you think I should say something like "remove 3 murlocs" or "destroy 3 murlocs" to have a different flavor, or should I change it mechanically?
Hey everybody! This is my first entry into the card design competition, and I'm pretty excited. What do you think?
I think I like the first one better, and I'm not sure about the wording on the second one. Murloc should be capitalized and I forgot the period, but I can fix that in my next iteration. Feedback is appreciated.
I'll check those out, thanks : )
So, I haven't played in a year or two, and I just got back in. I just opened up a copy of Vessina, and I was wondering what decks I could build with her, because I have no idea what to do : ). I've got about 7000 dust saved up from last time I played, so if anyone has some fun decklists, I'd appreciate it. Thanks!